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And generally another comma after the second "No" in "No...No you're not." Unless you want that second phrase all said in one breath. Out of context, it's hard to edit dialogue, since it's permitted to bend or break standard grammatical rules.

I can see two potential options for you, depending on what sort of feeling you are trying to evoke.

If the person saying it is thinking, hedging, or otherwise giving the question thought, go with the elipse.

If they are being brusque, annoyed, or already know or do not care about the question, then remove the elipse and put a comma in there.

Or at least that's how I do it.

*bow* Thanks for the tips guys. I worry about a lot of things when I'm making comics, and dialog is one of them. Especially when the characters in question aren't mine and/or new. Shifting through the comic archive and nothing seems to be sticking out voice wise. So there's this air of unsure-ness on whether or not I"m representing the characters right.

Also, should I just post any page I finish immediately or should I finish the story first and show it all in one burst? On one hand, if I just post the whole story the better it can be judged as a whole without that thing webcomics seem to have where there could be ten pages of discussion on a single introductory page. But then if it's presented in small plot threads, certain flaws could be ironed out before they wrinkle the whole tapestry of things.
Hmm.

Little bits man. I am far too impatient otherwise.

Whoa that was fast! Okay :) Sorry if the whole thing turns out to be predictable.


I'll come out with the next page as soon as I can.

Trace's son is a monkey!

Rather good. I like your style. --makes note to check this thread in the future--

Oh Snap!

Also, Wonderful :grin:

Thank you. I purposely had Zao cling to his mother's back like a monkey on purpose to see if anyone would pick up on that instinctual quirk of his.



Ho-Hah! Thanks :)

That's a pretty adorable thing for the little guy to remember about his folks. What a sweetheart.

*Starts to foam at the mouth while rolling on the ground*

That's awesome.

D'awwwwww!

The reason the child is a little monkey-ish i'm guessing is because humans evolved from ape-like creatures, therefore our pure genetics is simian?

Otherwise, I love Flora just going ...!

Edit: I think you broke Check-Source. He's getting whipped cream all over the ground. He doesn't like hybrids.

Nah, check his sig. He's the one that doesn't like kids. >.< I think it's cute though. Even if they do act like little monkeys. >.>

Thanks, I'm glad he made a good first impression. I figured it would be kind of like a child growing up witnessing their parents kiss whenever one comes home, and the parents gradually stopping that ritual.


S-sorry, will you be okay?


|D Thanks!



Yup, basically taking the human side and making it more 'keidran-ish'. (I don't really know how to word it). Thanks I really like doing reaction shots.



Heh heh, Thanks :)

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Much more people reacted to the comic than I thought! Well I did say that I was gonna post the next page as soon as I could.


The 'punchline' makes me feel a little guilty. Poor Flora, I can't even get into that position. And it has nothing to do with you being out of shape, Oh NO! Cupil! Shut-up voice in the back of my head! Also, some Kanti and wittle Kratos. The pouncing lesson was generally inspired from watching my own cats.