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Drow? Then it is a D&D story?

So, it seems Telki can be a little brash at times. I must admit, I'm beginning to warm to her.
Well done, yet again.


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Oh honey, Telki was my very first DnD character, and therefore the most like me. She'll act on her impulses, where I'm not as likely because of real life social constraints: embarassment, convention, etc. I guess you can view her as "me unchained".

And yes, this is a mishmash of original DnD with some second edition thrown in, set in Faerun.


Oh, and due to several magical mishaps, Gideon has a "hubba hubba " factor of near godliness, and would be part of the reason Telki's so smitten, and blatant about it.


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It is a good story as far, and I am compelled to keep reading :) . I am going to go back to reading storys from the shadows 8) . Keep up the good work :) .


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Anyone out there know what I'm talking about? Anyone???

YES!
Oh, wait. No. Not really. Kinda.


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Wynni wrote:
Oh honey, Telki was my very first DnD character, and therefore the most like me. She'll act on her impulses, where I'm not as likely because of real life social constraints: embarassment, convention, etc. I guess you can view her as "me unchained".


Though I did not play DnD much, I found it a great and fun way to create character :) s. I still have character sheets of old characters that are about four years old. I hope to put them in stories some day.

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Oh, and due to several magical mishaps, Gideon has a "hubba hubba " factor of near godliness, and would be part of the reason Telki's so smitten, and blatant about it.


I could definately sense the "hubba hubba" factor when Telki first met him :wink: .

Great job on the update by the way. I am liking these longer ones.


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Not as long an update as I'd like, but life happens.


Evening at Lord Paladinson's castle was a whirlwind of sights, sounds, and textures that left her poor senses reeling. The clutter of sensory input had overloaded her ability to process long ago. She had taken to simply smiling and nodding at everyone. Luckily, Gideon did not seem to mind the deathgrip she kept on his well tailored arm, and intercepted a lot of the questions coming her way. How he had found a gown her size, Telki wasn't sure, but it fit like it had been custom made for her. Which begged the question: when had he taken her measurements, and why didn't she remember enjoying it?


“Telki!” A voice she knew since infancy cut across the clamor like a deep struck bell note. The crowds parted as if by magic, as several hundred pounds of wemic , ....was that a ball gown? came barreling down on her. Telki simply threw her arms out, and embraced her sister back.

“I am so glad to see you!” Telki whispered into her Sister's golden mane. Her hair always smelled like sweet summer sun. It didn't matter what fragrance was used to wash it. Her own wonderful scent always came through.

'What possessed you to run off from me like that? Do you know what I've had to do to find you?” Wemie put Telki down, and fixed her with the requisite big sister stare.

“I'm sorry, it seemed necessary when I stepped forward. I certainly didn't mean to get carted off. How did you find me again?”

“A bard helped me, named Orrin O'Cunnin.”

“O'Cunnin is here tonight?” Gideon's dark eyes started scanning the room for the bard. “Ladies, I must speak with him for a bit. If you'll excuse me?”

“Yes, we're this evenings entertainment, he's setting up by the Great Hearth.”

“'We?' Oh Wemie, you're to dance for us?”

“Unfortunately. I might wind up banned from the palace after this.“


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Nice update! I can understand what Wemie feels. I can't dance to save my life :? .


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Nicely done, Wynni. Poor Wemie.
Unfortunately, I also cannot dance.
Truly we are all doomed to live dance-less lives.


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*finally catches up... sorta*
I must say, Wynni deah, this Telki lass grows on a chap, she does.


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From you, oh wizard of words, that is mighty praise indeed. *happy blush*
Seriously dear, I had started to doubt my ability.


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From you, oh wizard of words, that is mighty praise indeed. *happy blush*
Seriously dear, I had started to doubt my ability.

Wizard of words?? :oops: :oops: :oops: *spins in a tiny circle*
Don't doubt your abilities. Everybody does, but usually it's just writer's block, or a wrong mood, or... gas. :roll:


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Short update! paper due! project must be identified! Grad classes have begun! /faint!
Now that Telki had her sister and something to look forward to, the party had become bearable, even at times, enjoyable. Despite her sister's dire outlook on her dance performance, Telki knew better. Nothing was more graceful than a Wemic in dance. She'd seen Wemie dance before, when she thought no one was watching her. She might not remember her life with her tribe, but her body sure did. Maybe it was a kind of racial memory. This time, when a curious courtier came up to her, the smile was genuine.

Gideon saw Orrin setting up right where Wemie? had said he would be: next to the great hearth. Watching him set yet another instrument up, Gideon idly wondered how he transported them all, and then noticed the peculiar pack behind him: a rather large bag of holding. Gideon's lips quirked. Orrin was either a very wealthy bard, a very stealthy bard, or a well connected bard.
Turning over what little he'd heard of the bard, there was nothing to indicate he wasn't all three.

“To what do I owe this most auspicious visit from the Grimmest Brother?” The man had ears like a bat, too.

“Something tells me you already have a fair idea, since you came with the conundrum's 'sister'.”

“Ah yes, those two are fit fodder for a full cycle of songs in and of themselves. But my sources tell me none of it is fabricated: Magical users are disappearing in HuornWood, Secular and Clerical alike. My sources also tell me they aren't being kidnapped by anything natural, either. “ Orrin finally looked up from the mandolin he was tuning, and held Gideon's piercing black gaze. “that includes Drow, Gideon.”

Now, he had a quandary. Which came first? His duty to his brother, or this, more mysterious and possibly more menacing duty? What could be more menacing than Drow?

“Oh, I'm glad you came to me, I have a message for you: Blackstaff wants a meeting in the morning.”

Yep, Orrin definitely had connections in high places. Blackstaff was a law unto himself. Rumor held that he was one of the hidden lords of Waterdeep. No one was brave, or foolish, enough to ask him outright. “What time, and where, Orrin?”

“We are to present ourselves at the base of the Black Tower at nine sharp, the rest will handle itself. This includes the girls, of course.”

“Of course.”


By the time Gideon rejoined Telki, he had decided that the Drow problem looked like it would have to wait. That rankled. It literally felt like an itch he couldn't reach to scratch, and it was clawing its way inside his deepest marrow.

“What did Orrin say to cause such thunderclouds on your brow?”

“What?” Gideon pulled himself out of his musings to gaze at the pixie face at his elbow.
“That lady was coming to talk to us, and you glared at her so fiercely, she turned and ran.”

“Lady Huxley? She can run?”

“Like a rabbit through high grass.”


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Nice update. Very interesting.
One suggestion: when a character is quoting while speaking (i.e. "finger-quotes") use only the single quote marks, like so: "I will call it a 'Death Star'."
It just looks a little smoother, I think.

Any errors I caught are marked in red below.
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Gideon saw Orrin setting up right where Wemie had said he would be: next to the great hearth. Watching him set yet another instrument up, Gideon idly wondered how he transported them all, and then noticed the peculiar pack behind him: a rather large bag of holding. Gideon's lips quirked. Orrin was either a very wealthy bard, a very stealthy bard, or a well connected bard.
Turning over what little he'd heard of the bard, there was nothing to indicate he wasn't all three.

[...]

“Ah yes, those two are fit fodder for a full cycle of songs in and of themselves. But my sources tell me none of it is fabricated
t: Magical users are disappearing in HuornWood. Secular and Clerical alike. My sources also tell me they aren't being kidnapped by anything natural, either. “ Orrin finally looked up from the mandolin he was tuning, and held Gideon's piercing black gaze. “that includes Drow, Gideon.”

[...]

Now, he had a quand
ary. Which came first? His duty to his brother, or this, more mysterious and possibly more menacing duty? What could be more menacing than Drow?



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Thanks, between the keyboard not picking up all the keystrokes, a nigh worthless spellchecker on my 602text program, and the help of an 11 month old, it's amazing there were only those few.


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Ah! The plot thickens! (sorry I just love saying that :roll: )

I am beginning to really like Orrin as a character. A bard and a spy (or something similar to a spy) all in one!

Good update!


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