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Not bad, both are pretty original in their own sense, and not just another version of your first two. I see you attempted using multiple layers in 'Rose, rose, rose, rose'. That makes it interesting to listen to, and is fairly melodic as a result, but there is some bad synchronization and external sounds at points. If you are still using Audacity, you might want to try lowering the volume of one layer, so you create a main and support layer of singing. That makes it easier for someone to concentrate on and it will allow the support track to meld into the background. Playing the track at the same time as recording the next might help keep the two tracks together, so they don't sound like a tangled mess.

'Come away' doesn't leave me with much to say, but I'll try. It has lyrics that work with the melody. In fact, the tune is rather soothing, if not a bit haunting around the chorus. The last lines of both choruses have a bit of a break in between the words. In my opinion, it might be better if you just flowed through them, then trail off. You seem to take breaths in the middle of some lines, which is pretty jarring for this melody. Timing between verses was slightly inconsistent, but I can't really hold that against you.

Now the rest of you, the ones who looked at the above post. If you look at the thread, at least say something. This board suffers from one of the smallest followings, aside from the tech board and thanks to the roleplaying board. In fact, I don't think this place even has a moderator anymore.

Oh Wynni, my dear Wynni, you simply muct keep this up. I"m loving the lullabies, and your voice is simply beautiful. Your family is very lucky to have you^^

Somni 8)

Rose, Rose, Rose was good to listen, too. The layering was pretty good. There were times in the song where the layering was perfect, but there were times that I could not understand the words or I had to listen very very closely to make out the words.

Come Away probably has the best melody out of the four (at least in my opionon). As Fatalcrash said, the melody was very soothing. The only thing I think that needs work is that at times you seem to pause or speed up your voice in order to try to keep up with the melody. Well, actually I guess that is what is suppose to happen. What I mean is, I am no vocal expert or singer to point out, but your voiced at times seemed a little forced (if that makes any sense). Over all though, I think it is my favorite out the 4 so far :D .

I feel like listening to some Enya now!

Can't say much except for the following.

Female Tauren = Cow?

Not really a lot of description.

Like Rexis and Kestra, there are certain points which are 'out of universe', if such a term exists. For example, are 'water boys' in WoW? I wouldn't know, because I don't play it. Hate MMOs. I had the idea water boys were in charge of the, well, water for a sports team. Like that movie of the same name.

Nice. Might be one of the most memorable quotes around the forum for me. But, who exactly are the pig people? The only reason I know of the barrens is their Chuck Norris chat. I never bothered finding out what they were killing at the same time.

Point taken about the water boys. And I had no idea Taurens ate meat. That aside, I've noticed that since Warcraft tended to use a single gender for most of the armies it featured, choosing the other gender became very a very odd choice. Female Taurens, female Orcs, male night elves, etc etc.

I kept thinking of male Taurens as looking like bulls. When WoWcraft came out, I saw the character creation screen and immediately went:

Taurens eat meat? Huh...I never knew that. I have only played Warcraft 3 and the Frozen Throne, so I don't know all the details about the races that WoW shows. Nice story though.

Though I like the Warcraft universe, I am not going to get WoW or any other MMOGS. I have this little issue about paying a monthly fee :? . To me, having to pay a fee would seem to me like the creators "forcing" you to play the game, to get all your money's worth in a since. I would like to try a MMOG if it were free, where it be RPG, FPS, OR RTS style I do not really care. I think it would be fun.

Back and Forth
chorus:
Back and Forth, Dizzy swing
Someday I'll fly like the birds that sing

Back and forth, Higher Still
Someday I'll touch the sky, Yes I will!

In my Garden All alone
Sits my swing which is my throne
Everyday here court I hold
To find an escape before I'm old

chorus

No one knows how lonely grows
Time, with only long shadows
And a rose though pretty be
Cannot keep me company

chorus

Up and over lonely halls
Up and over shadowed walls
Up into that great blue sky
I, oh I, have learned to fly

I, oh I, have learned to fly.

(no, she didn't die, quit being morbid)

This one, and the theme song from the Last Unicorn, can be downloaded from file front at....
http://hosted.filefront.com/Wynnefredd/

I can say that these are easily the best lyrics you've come up with so far.

Brings be back when I used to play on the swings during elementary school. We would have contest to see who could jump off and land the farthest. The the fastest form of play, but it was fun.

Great job on the lyrics! They are some of the best yet.

Mulgore Menace


So there I was, on the Golden Plains, all of Mulgore's Grace and Beauty there for my enjoyment, when suddenly .. . ..a shriek of pure terror rent the air. Naturally, I went to inspect, and found a tiny little gnome up a tree, with a kodo beneath, polishing his horns on the bole. I couldn't help it, I rolled with laughter.

"Would you be so good as to draw that wretched beast away, so that I might descend? This is no way to treat such an important warlock as myself."

"And were you a competent warlock, you'd know this beast meant you no harm, and would be about your business."

There we stood, in the late afternoon sun of a Beautiful Golden Plains day, in a haze of mutual unimpressed. The Gnome did not appear to be impressed with my logic, and I clearly was not impressed with his consequence. We waited for the kodo to amble off.

The gnome was so intent on the kodo's retreating form that he startled badly when I finally spoke again. "Now, unless you are going to admit being afraid of me; it appears safe to come down." The warlock nearly lost his perch at my voice.

I laughed. His already red face became redder, and his discomfort only made his dismount that more difficult. I laughed harder. The final disgrace occurred: he fell out of the tree onto his rear. I rolled with laughter.

"I am a warlock of consequence, I am afraid of nothing! I wield powers of which you only can dream!" He was holding so much power, his beady little eyes shone like lamps.

One of the first lessons a spell caster learns: never hold power while angry. My laughter dried like a squall in Durotar. My home was precious to me, and this little runt was threatening the very existence of everything within twenty leagues--including Thunderbluff.

"You do realize holding that much power when your emotions are out of check is a very dangerous game to play?" Foolish shaman! Reason will not work on this creature, think!

"Games! I play no games! Now you see me as powerful and dangerous, where before I was just a joke. Could it be that you are learning respect at last?"

"I have always respected the damage power can cause, especially uncontrolled power." Careful shaman, this gnome is not playing with a full deck, do not tip him over here where there is too much at stake. Where though? Ahhhh, two problems with one exploding gnome, now that sounds wonderful. How to lure him there?

"Bah! I easily control more power in my sleep than you ever will! I'll show you! A contest! You will contest with me shaman, in who can summon and control the most power!" Blessed Earth Mother, he's doing the hard part for me!

"I am not as confident as you gnome, I would rather try this somewhere I know I will do no harm, and I do not think there is sufficient life here for you to draw on, to truly impress me, correct?" Thankfully, all the herds had moved on to the waterholes, so the plains did look barren from here.

"Fine, I issued the challenge, you make pick the place." The gnome still hadn't relinquished his hold on magical energies, and his eyes were glowing fiercer than ever. Could I get him there in time?

"The Dwarven mine is chock full of robust dwarves, and the caves will keep a reign on the energies should they escape; there will suffice." Oh, could we get there in time?

"Well shaman, we are here, now show me what you can do." I am still amazed the dwarves permitted us entrance, since the last time I was here I culled their numbers. But then, none of these saw me do that. Since more diggers winked at me than I cared to count on our entry, perhaps they wanted the little rudity to get his comeuppance as well.

"I have never played this game, and do not know what to do. Please, show me what is expected?" Stroke the ego to its doom, stroke the ego to its doom . . . .

"Watch then, shaman, and learn what true power is!" The gnome was already so lit, he looked more like a foresaken than a living being. One thing I knew and was counting on: Warlock's power draws on life, including that of its caster. So all I had to do was wait . . .

The rocks beneath his feet began to melt. His skin shriveled and cracked. His eyes were nigh on incandescent with power, and still he called upon more. When his knees buckled, and his head bent to the point it touched the melted stones, I struck.

A lightening bolt quickly followed by an earthshock disintegrated his body, and pushed the energies he summoned into the very bedrock of the mines.
I could feel the tremors start as I called up ethereal power to whisk me home. I will not be surprised to learn there is one less mine in Mulgore tomorrow.

http://www.myspace.com/branberaYou'll find all kinds of wow stories and whatnot browsing through the blog, including this one. Just posting a little something interesting here, so I dont' get so buried I can't find it :roll: and of course I think it's a good read.

Nice update.

I just have a couple questions. Is this connected to the story you previously posted on this thread or is it seperate?

Also, just two comments. What exaclty is the narrator. I was kind of lost that there was not description of the narrator. Is the narrator a tauren, blood elf, or what? Also, I thought the scene transition from the plains to mines was a little too quick (at least to me).

I found it funny when the gnome warlock was getting into a fit. It kind of reminded me when I wrestle with my little dog. When we wrestle, I sometimes stop, look down at him, and do nothing. After a minute he starts barking at me to get me wrestle him more :D .