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For Upon the Rotunda:
Certainly not a bad start. My father uses this program, so I've had some exposure to it. I'll start of by saying that the tempo changes and rhythm kept me interested, and it's definitely the strong point in your piece. The melody is simple, but that's not a bad thing. I'd say try to add in a counter-melody, which is very typical of piano music. Also, try to change the key signature near the climax of the piece -- that will build the excitement for when you actually reach it.
I also didn't notice too much of a climax. I say this because the entire piece seemed to me mezzo forte dynamic, and you never really had many soft parts to counteract the louder parts. If you were to incorporate dynamic changes into the music, that would help you build excitement for the climax.
For Low Fly:
Excellent use of instrumentation. I enjoyed hearing so many different parts, which was different from your first piece, in which you only used piano. The double bass solo was impressive, and added well to the overall piece. Percussion was interesting, so you kept with your good use of tempo and rhythm. I don't have too much to say about this piece critique-wise, other than that you could have used all your instruments for more than one melody. I though I heard a counter-melody, which would have been very nice. Overall, a well written piece.
For Esterschii Dotta:
I liked the way the piano kept moving up and down the scale. You made full use of it's range, which is very impressive. A short, well executed piece, though I would have liked to see a more complex melody -- perhaps a few chords.
For Batter Fanfare:
The intro, which was much different than the rest of your pieces, really grabbed me. I loved the minor key, which added a darker tone to your music. It was a nice diversion from all your other pieces. The deep base drum kept an errie tempo, which suited this piece very well. The soprano voices were well placed at the climax, and the tenor sounded fine. The synthesizer, however, didn't sound like it really belonged in the piece -- as did the violin near the end. Not bad sounding, just different than the rest of the piece.
For The Tenth Tower:
It sounds unfinished. The underlying harmonics of the instruments just repeats over and over with no variation. It you were to change it up (slightly!), then you would have an easier time capturing the listener's attention. The same applies to the voices, but try to differ their parts into more of a melody/2nd harmony to, again, add more depth to the piece.
Overall, you have a great start. Try to build up to the climax using different techniques. And, seriously, try something besides 4/4. Try triple meter, that's a fun one to play around with. Maybe even 7/8 if you feel so daring.
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