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Okay, so this is basically my first devoted cartoon/manga style character.
http://kholhaus.deviantart.com/art/Sheni-or-Flint-92755714
I need you to look, find flaws, and help me build upon those.
and please go easy on me, this is my first contribution to the drawing board. :lol:

First of all, I am no artist, so I will probably be wrong/cruel on some things (sorry ahead of time)

I would start by making him a little less crosseyed. Sometimes it works, but if the eyes are too close together, looks goofy. Also, his right knee, if it's going to be bigger than the left (his left, not ours lol) can his leg be bent a little just to show why it's bigger?

lol, that's all I got, good luck! And he looks good otherwise ^^

You're right, that knee, i was thinking it wasn't too noticeable.

I'm not so sure about the eyes though, I used Tom's drawings as a reference. as you can see, only a few things, and i mean a few have been derived from his style.

It's the only way to LEARN.

OMG CRITICS TIME XD

Hope I'll not be too hard :(

-The direction of the feet and the body aren't the same.
-Neck too tiny (or it is a style you created ?)
-Eyes too squary-like, put more curves :o
-I must agree with ruscfox for the eyes, the technique might have been the same as Tom, but the result isn't the same. Currently, it looks like he his fixing his nose with both eyes. When looking forward, they usually are in the center of the eye.
-I don't understand why there is one shoulder higher than the other one, maybe the sword is heavy o.O

BUT !
I must say that I really like the sword, it really looks like it is in perspective. <3