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Author's Note: This is the greatest story of all time. :D

Ahem, but seriously- it's really good imo, best story I've written.
What I'm posting is a Prologue of sorts.. It's the Legend that the rest of the story revolves around. So read, enjoy, and please comment!



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The Legend of the Five Gods
By: Jae
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_____ In Inanis, the world of the gods, there lived many dragon-gods. Each god is commissioned to create their own world. Tatsu, one of the more benevolent gods, created the land of Solum. It was a magnificent world, but it was not enough. He decided to create... life. He created the Bestia, he created the Humans, and he even created all of the Animals. He made the world come alive, and that world flourished. But even Tatsu could not do it alone. He created five gods to help him. He thought that this would be paradise. But even paradise has its imperfections.

_____ Long ago, Solum was inhabited by several varieties of Humans and Bestia, animal-like people. These mortals all had one thing in common; they worshiped Lord Tatsu. Tatsu was an enormous pearl-white dragon with a light gray mane and tail. His kindness could be seen through his pale lavender eyes, and his rage would be seen through his arcane power. Throughout the land, all the people looked to him, but lived differently. To rule the people the way they wished to be, Tatsu created five elemental gods, each in the form of an animal.

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_____ To the northwest, the earth was made of flat, red stone. In this territory, the sky was often covered by storm clouds, for the god ruling it was a god of lightning. Neko, the white cat, was a fierce god. He strictly ruled over his people, and took everything seriously. If another god were to tell him he was too harsh on his people, he’d reply saying it made them stronger, like him.

_____ The land to the northeast was a scorching desert with a god of fire. This god, Kitsune, appeared in the form of a fox. He and his people enjoyed playing tricks on others. Kitsune found it the most fun when doing it to the other gods, preferably Neko. They were never very dangerous... just enough to get a good laugh.

_____ Taka, the hawk and the god of wind, ruled the land to the southwest. His people lived in snowy mountains that touched the sky. Taka hardly visited his land, he preferred to be alone. His people still worshiped him; they said he gave them ‘freedom’.

_____ The land to the southeast was a thick forest. The forest was ruled over by a god of nature; Ookami, the black wolf. He would go out of his way to protect a member of his ‘pack,’ but if anyone were to offend him, he wouldn’t hold back his strength.

_____ To the south, the land was covered with water, for the swamps inhabitants were ruled by a god of water. Kuma, the brown bear, ruled his people with kindness and treated them as equals, if not better. If they were in need of anything, he would give them twice that. When he wasn’t helping his own people, he would occasionally go to the rest of the world and give them extra rain.

_____ The center of the world was a giant volcano. The top of what was once a mountain was ripped away millions of years ago, leaving the lava exposed. Floating above is the land that was removed, and atop this floating piece of earth is a giant white castle, where Lord Tatsu and the five gods would live.

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_____ The dragon would hardly have anything to do with the animal gods overseeing the world. He would often disguise himself as a type of Dragonkin so he could go down and see for himself how his world really was.

_____ One day, when Tatsu went to Neko’s land, he saw a human girl. She had long black hair that flowed in the wind. She was short for a human, but Tatsu didn’t mind. When he finally spoke to her he looked into her large brown eyes and asked her name. ‘Elizabeth’ was her reply. She didn’t seem to mind that he wasn’t human; in fact she believed he was a common demon like the rest.

_____ Tatsu began to visit her as often as he could. He got to know her to the point he was able to call her his friend. He learned of her fears and ambitions. She even had dreams of becoming a world leader, which he found quite humorous and ironic. However, he never told her what he really was. He couldn’t bring himself to tell her that he was a god. He didn’t like to lie to her, but he thought her knowing would make her uncomfortable to be around him. She seemed happy knowing him the way he was, which in turn made him happy as well. He didn’t want to risk losing that. He wouldn’t even tell the elemental gods about his Dragonkin form for fear of them finding out. There were no rules against Gods and Mortals being close, but it still didn’t seem ‘normal’ to him.

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_____ Back at the castle, Tatsu sighed as he watched Neko argue with the other gods, trying to prove he ruled his territory better than the rest. He taunted them, especially the fox. After an hour or so of them arguing, Tatsu threw them out and secretly went to see his human friend. The town was covered in black clouds and lightning. The people who lived there didn’t seem to notice or care. To them, this was normal. They would walk down the street even in the worst of it.

_____ Elizabeth took Tatsu to the edge of town to watch the clouds. She loved the way it looked when a bolt of lightning hit the ground, as long as it wasn’t too close. But this time they saw something strange. The clouds began to glow red; a spot of fiery red in the pitch black sky. Flames exploded from the clouds and rained over the town. A large fire bolt aimed toward Tatsu and Elizabeth smashed into the ground in front of them, and the impact sent them flying. Tatsu helped the girl up and looked to see what had happened. The fire god, Kitsune appeared before them, facing the town. Before Tatsu could say anything, Neko appeared in a bolt of lightning and began attacking the fox.

_____ Tatsu ordered them to stop, but neither of them knew of his Dragonkin form, and ignored him completely. He sighed as he looked to Elizabeth. She still didn’t know who he really was, and he hadn’t planned to tell her any time soon. As they fought, Neko and Kitsune smashed into buildings, killing many citizens, and neither of them even realized what they were doing. Though they were once friends, they were blinded with rage. If they continued, there would be nothing left. Tatsu had no choice. He snarled as a faint white aura appeared around him.

_____ Elizabeth stood in shock as she witnessed Tatsu transform into a large white dragon, with purple eyes, and a pale blue mane; the ruler of her world, and the elemental gods. Lord Tatsu. Once again, he ordered them to stop and this time they did immediately. The dragon let out a loud roar and it began to rain, extinguishing the fires. He then told the two to report to his castle and await his return.

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_____ Tatsu turned to face the girl he befriended. She stood trembling, staring at the giant beast before her. He lowered his head to her level and apologized for lying about who he was. The girl just smiled and began petting his furry snout. Tatsu slowly turned away and said he had to leave, but the girl grabbed him and begged not to be left alone.

_____ No human had ever been to Lord Tatsu’s castle. It was created in the sky intentionally so they could not enter. The animal gods could cast a spell to teleport there, but never any mortals. The dragon was about to turn her down... but when he looked her in the eyes, he decided she couldn’t possibly do any harm. Elizabeth climbed onto Tatsu’s back and he flapped his wings, slowly lifting them off the ground, and flying toward his home in the sky.

_____ Elizabeth stood next to Lord Tatsu’s throne and watched as he yelled at Neko and Kitsune. He finally dismissed them to their wings of the castle and began to speak with his guest. She mentioned the god’s fight that Tatsu had interrupted. If they had continued, who would win? If all five had been there, who would be the strongest? Tatsu often wondered this himself, but never felt the need to test it. The girl laughed and suggested a tournament. Tatsu looked at her and laughed, but then said ‘why not,’ thinking it might be fun.

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_____ The next day it was announced to the world; a tournament to find the strongest of the gods. The winner would be the new god for ‘Princess’ Elizabeth, and get ‘ultimate bragging rights,’ in the words of the Princess. This caught the interest of Neko and Kitsune especially. The mortals began to make bets on which God would be the winner. Some would get into fights over which god was best. The world erupted in a five-way religious war. However, it wasn’t their fight that mattered, but the fight of the Five Gods.

_____ The animal gods didn’t really want to fight. They had been friends since the beginning of their everlasting existence. But they were nothing but servants to their Lord Tatsu, and what he ordered is what would be so. They spent their last few days together, knowing it would be over the moment the battle began.

_____ Tatsu returned to his castle the night before the battle. He had left Elizabeth at her house, to see her family. When he flew up to the gates, Neko was waiting for him. He thanked him for the opportunity to show his strength, but also asked him why? The two looked down to the world of the mortals. They were fighting each other, trying to prove their god was best. A meaningless fight, when the gods were created equal. Why would Tatsu start that?

_____ He didn’t know. He had no idea. He just... wanted to make her happy. Before Neko could say any more, Tatsu began to walk away. He said he felt weak, and wanted to lie down. The Creator of the universe and all that is good. The dragon of limitless arcane power, feeling weak; this, above all things, caught Neko’s attention.

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_____ The day of the tournament, Elizabeth met with Tatsu to give him a gift. Tatsu had never received a gift before; he was surprised when she mentioned it. She said she made it from magic he taught her, with some techniques of her own. Tatsu was shocked. Mortals can’t use magic, it was impossible for her to have her own ‘technique’. He stuttered and asked her what she meant- what it was. She showed him a box; just a plain, ordinary, box. The dragon opened the lid and inside was a silver, spiked collar...just his size.

_____ Just looking at it, Tatsu could sense the arcanic power coming from the collar. He asked the girl what it was for, and she assured him it was just supposed to look nice. As he looked in her eyes, his head started pounding. He whimpered in pain as she put the collar around his neck.

_____ Elizabeth grinned wickedly as Tatsu’s eyes faded to a dark gray color. She thanked him for the spells he taught her and informed him of what she truly was; a human born with vampiric powers, power to absorb pure magical essence from others. The more time she spends with the gods, the stronger she gets. Tatsu tried to attack the demon he thought he befriended, but couldn’t. He was no longer in control of his own body. It moved as she commanded. She walked toward the castle, and he followed, thinking to himself about all he had done wrong.

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_____ Meanwhile, the animal gods were preparing to fight. The arena was the land surrounding Lord Tatsu’s volcano, in the neutral territory of the world. Finally, Tatsu flew down with the Princess on his back. The crowd cheered. People had come from all around the world to see the battle. Humans and Demons alike, each hoping their god would come out on top. At the sound of Tatsu’s mighty roar the fight began.

_____ The animal gods looked at one another. They were best friends. Though they each wanted to be called the best, they remembered their friendship. They didn’t want to fight, but they couldn’t go against any of their Lord Tatsu’s orders. They had been friends... but at the sound of the roar... it was over.

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_____ Ookami let out a howl as he ran up to Taka. He jumped into the air to attack, but was pulled down by Kuma, who tackled him in mid-air. Kuma’s magic power was specialized in strength and healing, while Ookami had defense and healing which gave the bear a slight advantage. But Ookami focused on his physical strength; the strength of a wolf. Takas hovered above as he watched the two animals attack and heal repeatedly, then flapped his wings, conjuring small tornados that ripped into the two beasts.

_____ Ookami smashed his paws into the ground, sending boulders flying into the air and knocking Taka to the ground. The hawk scrambled to stand as Kuma charged into him, knocking him onto his back. Ookami ran toward them and pounced onto Kuma’s back, clawing into his flesh.

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_____ At the sound of Tatsu’s roar, Neko and Kitsune snuck away from the other three. Finally, a one-on-one fight between them, Kitsune snarled and began to glow red. He, Neko, and Taka all specialized in pure magic strength. Though they could attack physically as well, they couldn’t take the hits, and the fox knew this. Kitsune’s body was engulfed in flames as he charged Neko. The fire multiplied his attacks, and worked as a damage shield against Neko’s physical attacks.

_____ The cat jumped toward the volcano, climbing the rocks to a small cliff. He summoned bolts of lightning down to the fox. The two attacked back and forth. Lightning vs. Fire. They continued until they couldn’t anymore. In the end, they stood face to face, panting; each trying to scratch the other, back and forth.

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_____ Ookami bit into Kuma’s neck and Taka clawed into Ookami’s back. Kuma summoned an orb of water around Taka, leaving him floating, imprisoned in water. He then stood on his hind legs and smashed his paw into Ookami’s jaw. But the wolf counterattacked by slashing his claw through Kuma’s left eye. Blood dripped down Kuma’s face as he stumbled to a tree, trying to lean against it to hold his balance.

_____ Neko hissed as he chased Kitsune around the volcano. He finally caught up to him and tackled him into a tree... and Kuma. Ookami howled as roots sprouted out of the ground and wrapped around the Neko. Roses formed on the roots and entangled the cat even more. Neko pondered the wolf’s attack. It seemed pointless since he could attack from a distance with his lightning magic. Then, the rose vines began to sprout thorns that stabbed into Neko’s flesh. The feline tried to pull himself free but the struggle made his wounds deeper and his snow white fur began to stain blood red.

_____ Kitsune charged Taka, and unintentionally freed him from his watery prison. The hawk flapped his wings and sent Kitsune backwards onto Neko. The fox yelped in pain as he hit the thorns. He summoned fire to burn them, freeing Neko, but also hurting him even more.

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_____ The crowd cheered as the gods slaughtered each other. The all believed the gods were immortal, and they were right... in a way. No mortal can kill a god. But a fight between gods, though it had never been done before, could kill them. Tatsu knew this, and so did the ‘Princess’. She had planned on it. But the longer the fight lasts, the more time she has near them, meaning more magical essence absorbed. Tatsu could feel his power weakening, and Elizabeth was sure to remind him it was happening, knowing he couldn’t reply. He was dying inside, but his life couldn’t end. Though the crowd was cheering, inside they were questioning their dragon god. Losing all faith in him, this drained his power even more. It went so far that as his strength shrunk, his physical form did as well.

_____ Lord Tatsu created the world, and everything in it, including the five gods and Elizabeth. He exists by their faith alone. If no one believes in him, he would fade away. And without its creator, the world would not exist.

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_____ The five animals all panted, exhausted. They each began to glow as they stood in a pentagon shape across the battlefield. In front of each god appeared a ball of energy; pure essence of their element. At the same instant, each god shot a beam of energy forward. The five beams struck each other and exploded with arcane energy, backfiring at all of them. The battlefield was covered with a thick smoke and the crowd was silent. When it finally cleared, the world could see the result. Surrounding a crater formed by the impact of their final attacks, were five corpses; all that was left of the elemental gods.

_____ The crowd changed from cheering to crying. And the one to blame was Lord Tatsu. They began to riot- yelling, crying, some of them even threw stones and other objects. Though he showed no emotion, Tatsu was mourning inside. Not only were the gods... his friends, dead... but all faith in him seemed to be lost.

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_____ Elizabeth was playing the ‘concerned human’ role but was happier than she had ever been. Tatsu had almost all his strength drained, and the gods were dead. She decided this wasn’t enough. She was still mortal and would still die. Suddenly, an idea popped into her head and she grinned wickedly.

_____ She could use Tatsu’s power to reincarnate herself, so she would never truly die. But she couldn’t be alone. She’d need another god so she could keep renewing her power. She decided if she used the five animal gods, they would be too distracted by continuing their fight, carrying out Lord Tatsu’s final order, to stop her. The plan was perfect; except for one aspect. Though she was human and could easily be reborn again, the elemental gods only appeared in an animal form. Their souls needed a body to transform into that solid, living form.

_____ A human body would be the easiest for them to posses. The five gods would be reborn, sharing the bodies of humans. By predestined fate, five humans would be forced to fight one another. They would attempt to resist the tempting lures of the animal gods in order to save themselves, but it tragically would be a failed attempt. All the magical knowledge Elizabeth had told her it would be easy, in theory.

_____ But how often could she do this? She looked at Tatsu, his power was drained even more, and she didn’t want to waste her own, she intended on assuming the role of the new goddess of her world, now that Tatsu had no remaining faith. At the same time, she had to leave him with something, to keep him, and the universe, alive. With her and the five gods, he could probably reincarnate them every 200 years. The girl thought about it... 200 years was better than nothing, and the longer she waited the more time she lost. 300. 400. 500 years. She quickly decided to take it. Tatsu began to glow a faint white as the bodies of the five gods faded away.

_____ Tatsu could see the souls of his friends... they began to fade away into darkness. They were transported to a world to preserve them until they could return. Sitting next to him, Elizabeth smirked, and all around him, the mortals sobbed. Tatsu snarled as his collar began to glow white and crack. Princess Elizabeth shrieked as the collar exploded and Tatsu lashed forward, killing her in a single bite. She had been too busy thinking about her next life to focus on saving this one. Tatsu knew she would be back and would attempt to replace him again... but this at least gave him time.

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_____ Tatsu looked to his people. He didn’t know what to say, they had lost all faith in him. He didn’t even look like himself anymore. With all his power drained, he appeared to them as a Wyrm, a large snake with wings. His heavenly white scales had faded to an impure red. His mighty horns were gone completely. Tatsu called out, begging the mortals to listen to him, that he wasn’t at fault... but they just walked away.

_____ The sky was covered with black clouds, all throughout the land. Lightning storms, Hurricanes, Firestorms, Tornados, and Earthquakes raged across the land for the following five days, and on the sixth day, Lord Tatsu’s volcano erupted, leaving no evidence of the battleground.

_____ Tatsu watched this from his castle, helpless, the result of the gods’ final attack. He sighed as he felt the floating piece of land his castle stands upon fall downward, to cover the volcano once again. With no power to prevent it, the impact left the castle in ruins.

_____ No matter how much he may have wanted to, Tatsu couldn’t die. He was still immortal, and so he had to live with the guilt of what he had done. After the storms finally ended, the world was renewed. It was no longer divided into five climates. There were now four seasons throughout a year, and the remaining humans and demons built cities together, rather than divided towns. Tatsu watched as after all his time trying to create the perfect world, it all seemed better without him.

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_____ For thousands of years the world changed repeatedly, and Tatsu witnessed it all. He saw the gods come and go, each time trying to prove who the best was.

_____ For thousands of years they would possess the bodies of innocent humans and destroy friendships.

_____ For thousands of years they would destroy thousands of homes and families, while carrying out the orders of their Lord.

_____ For thousands of years, the one thing to remain the same would be the ruins of Lord Tatsu’s castles... and his haunting memories.


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The Legend of the Five Gods
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I'm not going to comment too much, because you've only posted a prologue. I can, however, say that the story is interesting enough to keep me reading on.

The names of the gods are painfully familiar.

Ok, I finally found sometime to read this.

I like it! It is rather good. A little depressing, but the ending was clever.

I only found one mistake...

"She looked at Tatsu, his power was drained even more, and she didn’t want to waist her own, she intended on assuming the role of the new goddess of her world, now that Tatsu had no remaining faith."

It is supposed to be "waste" not "waist."

Eep! *Fixes the misspelled word*

"Korith looked again to his friend, but she wasn't there. In her place was a beast. A demon. Two golden eyes stared angrily back at him. Korith tried to call her name again, but no words came out. Standing before him was a dire black wolf. Fangs bigger than his hands. Claws the size of his head. The beast in it's entirety was as big as a horse, if not bigger! Korith's vision began to fade as a blinding white light surrounded him."
*Taunt taunt*
Ahem.... so, yeah.. progress is happening. I will have the first real chapter up in as little as a week, or as long as two (if Christmas gets in the way)

Christmas gets in the way of everyone's schedule :wink: .

Chapter One:


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The Five Gods
Chapter: 1
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“Everyone knows the legend of the five gods! The story of the five elemental gods who ruled the world millions of years ago. The one who told them what to do was a dragon named Tatsu. One day, Tatsu decided to hold a tournament to find out who the strongest was. They fought for days, causing storms that destroyed the land. In the end, it was a five-way draw. It is said that the gods come back every five hundred years to finish the fight and find out, once and for all, who the strongest is.”
“And what about the dragon?” asked a little girl.
“Hehe, it is also said that his spirit lives within the castle ruins, waiting for a winner to return,” a mother replied, trying to sound scary, “and haunting any mortals who enter!”
“Aah!” cried the girl.
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“Aah!” cried a girl, jumping up in her bed, “M— mom?”
She looked around her room and was pulled back into reality.
“It was a... dream?” she muttered, as her eyes finally reached the clock, “Ah! I’m late!”
The girl jumped out of bed and brushed her short brown hair as fast as she could while putting on her pink school uniform.
“Kira!” a boy’s voice called from outside her bedroom door, “Are you up? You’re gonna miss the bus!”
“Yeah!” she replied, fixing her blouse, “I’m leaving now, Keno!”
Kira lived in a small house in a forest with her older brother, Keno. When she was young, she lost her parents in a car accident. Only Kira and her brother survived. They were taken in by a Cat-Bestia; a human with catlike features, who had been a friend of the family. Only a few years after, Keno began to work to pay for himself and Kira, alone.
Kira ran outside and began down the street as fast as her feet would go. She arrived at a stop sign as a big yellow bus drove up. Kira panted softly as she climbed up the stairs and walked to her usual seat.
“Hey, Kira!” a clearly dyed red-headed boy called, popping his head out from the seat behind her.
“Hey, TJ,” she moaned, still half asleep.
“So, what’s up??!” he asked.
Kira ignored the boy until he began poking her repeatedly to get a response.
“Ugh,” she moaned, “How can you be so hyper in the morning?!”
“How can you be for hyper at night?” TJ grinned.
Kira stared at her friend for a moment before deciding to simply slap the boy for being an idiot.
“Let me enjoy the bus ride in peace, TJ,” she mumbled, leaning against her window and trying to sleep.
“Hmph, fine. Be that way!” the boy snapped, leaning back in his seat, mumbling something about her being grumpy.
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After a short while, the two friends were at school and walked together to meet their other friends in the hallway outside the school’s library. They met there every morning before class.
“You’re late... again,” said a tall blonde girl, in a uniform matching Kira’s.
“Sorry, Petra,” Kira replied sarcastically.
“Hmm, that’s alright,” the girl said, winking one of her emerald eyes, “I’ll just blame TJ.”
The red-head glared back at her and the two girls laughed.
“Calm down,” a dark haired boy sitting on the floor said, “you take things so seriously, unless, of course, you’re the one laughing.”
“No I don’t, Robbie!” TJ said, annoyed.
“Yes, you do,” they all laughed together, all but one.
“Yeah, well... Korith doesn’t think so!” TJ said, pointing at the boy sitting next to Robbie.
He had dirty-blonde hair, and deep teal eyes that matched his school uniform. Korith slowly looked up, then just shook his head in silence. TJ sighed, and the bell for first period rang.
“Well,” Robbie grunted, standing up, “see you at lunch.”
Kira waved goodbye as her friends walked off... all but Korith. She smiled as he stood up and turned to her, wanting to say something, but he did first.
“...Bye...Kira,” he mumbled, turning to walk away.
The girl sighed in disappointment as she too, turned to walk to class.
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Kira sat at her desk, using her bag as a pillow and trying, once again, to sleep. The second bell, that meant it was time for class to begin, rang and the teacher walked in. There weren’t many Bestia, animal-people, in the world anymore. The majority of the population were human, but it wasn’t too uncommon to encounter them. The Math teacher who instructed Kira’s homeroom class was a Cheetah Bestia named Laura Spots. Mrs. Spots was a favorite of all her students, especially the male ones. Despite this, Kira didn’t care much for her. Though, she didn’t particularly care for anyone who woke her when she wanted to do nothing but sleep.
“Listen up, class!” she announced, “We have a new student joining our school today! Her name is Liz Regalis and I expect you to treat her with respect and...” she went on.
Kira decided to look up to see who the ‘newbie’ was. It was a human girl with long black hair, brown eyes and was much shorter than the teacher. As Kira looked her over, her neck slowly began to burn. Her vision blurred and she felt dizzy. Kira buried her face in her arms and moaned in pain. Mrs. Spots looked over to Kira and noticed her rubbing her neck with one hand.
“Kira?” she asked, “what’s wrong?”
“My...neck...!” she muttered, trying to hold back tears, “It... it hurts... really bad!”
Mrs. Spots moved closer to examine her student. There was a bright red ring around Kira’s neck, and was hot to touch.
“Kira! What did you do to your neck?!” Mrs. Spots asked, frantically.
“Ugh, what are you talking about?!” Kira yelled.
As she turned to look the teacher in the eyes, Mrs. Spots gasped. Kira had bright golden eyes and a silver collar appeared around her neck. The Cheetah only blinked and it was all gone, but Kira’s pain only intensified. Mrs. Spots was hopelessly confused and half-assumed this was some form of prank.
“Just... go to the nurse,” the confused teacher managed to utter, “Have her figure out what’s wrong with you.”
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Kira left the classroom, leaning against the wall to keep her balance. But the more she walked, the less pain she felt. By the time she reached the stairs, she felt fine. Thinking no one would believe her, she decided to skip the nurse and go hide in the bathroom until class was over.
The girl looked in the mirror, but the mark on her neck was gone. She saw nothing out of the ordinary. She tried, but couldn’t come up with any reasonable explanation for her pain. By the time the second period bell had rung, she’d convinced herself that she simply pulled a muscle, and went on with her day. By lunch, she had pretty much forgotten about it.
“So,” Petra said, tapping Kira who was trying to decide if her food was edible, “Me and Robbie have this new girl in our English class, second period...”
Kira looked up from her plate to acknowledge her friend.
“Yeah! She’s a total prep though! I can tell. Acts like she’s better than the rest of us and stuff,” she continued.
“Petra...” Robbie said, glaring at her.
All five were awkwardly silent for a while and ate their food, until finally, Kira spoke up.
“The new girl... ‘Liz,’” she mumbled, “She’s in my homeroom... But I didn’t really meet her... When I saw her... It was weird.”
Kira began to rub her neck at the thought of the pain. For the first time, Korith glanced over.
“... ...What’s...wrong?” he muttered quietly.
“On my god!” TJ yelled, pointing at the boy, “You can TALK!”
Petra and Robbie giggled. Not just because of Korith, but mostly because of TJ’s reaction. Finally, the bell to go back to class rang throughout the cafeteria, and the five friends, once again, went their separate ways.
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“Kira! Wait up!” Korith yelled, running up to her.
Kira turned in shock that her silent friend actually spoke.
“You,” he panted, “you were talking about that girl before, remember? What do you mean, ‘it was weird’..? What happened?”
Again, her hand went to her neck, “Well... I guess... my neck started to hurt, but that’s it. Why? What’s wrong?”
“Well,” Korith muttered, “I think it was the same person... I saw her in the hallway... some girl... My... my neck...”
All across the school, the ‘late bell’ rang. The two looked to each other, then decided to hide underneath the stairway to skip class together.
“So, what do you think is going on, Korith?” Kira asked, making sure there was no one around to see them, “I mean, don’t you think it’s just a coincidence that we both had neck pains after seeing that girl? Petra and Robbie didn’t say anything about it!”
“I know it’s kinda... random,” he mumbled, “but... maybe we aren’t the only ones... maybe we just haven’t found anyone else...”
“I don’t know, Korith,” Kira said, raising her voice, “I mean, this is just too weird! I hate to tell you this, but I think you’re just making a big deal out of nothing, and it’s kinda freaking me out!”
The two jumped at the sound of a door slamming above them. As they heard footsteps running down the stairs, they began to feel the same burning pain as before. A girl’s voice was repeating the phrase ‘I’m late’. The closer her voice came, the pain became more intense. Kira yelped as she, once again, grabbed her neck in pain.
“It’s... her...” she muttered as she fell to her knees in pain.
Korith also grabbed his neck, but was able to hold himself upright by leaning against a wall. They both looked up and found Liz standing before them.
“What...” he moaned, “What are you?! What are you doing to us?!”
Kira let out a cry of pain as a silver spiked collar began to form around her neck. She quickly fell to one side and lied on the floor in pain.
“Heh,” the girl grinned, wickedly, “Still standing are we? Kneel.”
Korith grunted as a collar matching Kira’s began to appear around his neck and fell to his knees in pain.
“Ki...ra!!!” he cried, glancing to her as best he could.
Her body was glowing with a pale green aura. She was silent as the collar appeared completely, then without warning, began to crack. Korith’s eyes widened as he saw the collar explode, engulfing Kira in a blinding green light.
“The...Wolf,” Liz announced, grinning.
“What?!” Korith yelled, as his collar too, began to crack, “Kira??!”
Korith looked again to his friend, but she wasn't there. In her place was a beast. A demon. Two golden eyes stared angrily back at him. Korith tried to call her name again, but no words came out. Standing before him was a dire black wolf. Fangs bigger than his head, claws the size of his hands! The beast in its entirety was at least seven feet tall, if not taller! Korith's vision began to fade as his collar exploded, and a blinding white light surrounded him.
“And here comes... the Hawk,” the girl said to herself.
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Out of the light flew a dire brown hawk. The wolf growled at the sight of it. He chased the bird through the door at the bottom of the staircase, ripping through the brick wall as if it were paper. Liz followed after them, but couldn’t keep up. She could only watch from afar as they fought.
The hawk turned to the wolf, hovering in place as it began to glow. He flapped his wings with great speed, conjuring five small tornados below him, all charging towards the wolf. The beast dodged the first two and slammed his paws into the ground as the rest raced closer. The impact shattered the stone and concrete, hurling it upwards into the air. The stone began to glow a green color as it shaped itself into a shield-of-stone, protecting the wolf from the raging wing. The shield stopped the next two tornados, but the last one slammed through, throwing the wolf backwards.
Liz looked up and saw the beast hurling toward her.
“Ookami?!” she cried. She sneered as he flew closer and called out, “Taka!”
The hawk sped to the girl and quickly grabbed her in his mighty talons, lifting her to the sky just as the wolf smashed into the ground where she had been.
The bird landed and walked away from the human girl. He slowly walked toward the rubble that buried his foe, ready to finish him off. The ground began to shake and the wolf lunged out of the rubble, grabbing the bird’s wing with his large fangs. As he tried to free his hind legs from the rubble, he fell to his belly. The hawk struggled to free himself, but the wolf would not release his grip.
The bird’s vision began to blur and he passed out. The black wolf dropped his prey and tried to stand once again. He let out as much of a victory howl as he possibly could before he too, passed out in a pool of blood.
Liz walked up to where the beasts had been.
“Ookami? Taka?” she called, looking closer.
In place of the gods were two humans; Kira and Korith, covered in blood. The short moment of calm was soon broken by the sound of sirens, coming closer and closer.

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The Five Gods
Chapter: 1
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Good update :D ! I wonder what was happening to Mrs. Spots during the battle.

/shrug >.>
Off teaching math somewhere? ^^;

You've got my attention for now.

Not-as-good taunt, but here it goes:

"Slowly, his hand moved to the side of his head, but he felt something strange. He had the ears of an animal. The ears of a fox. His teeth had changed to fangs, and his fingernails to claws. He also had a long fox tail with the same orange-and-white markings as his hair. He had transformed into what looked like a Fox-Bestia."

Next chapter coming soon~ :D

Chapter Two:

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The Five Gods
Chapter: 2
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Kira awoke on a white bed, in a white room, with a white curtain dividing it.
“Where... am I?” she mumbled to herself.
“Kira??” yelled her brother, sitting next to her bed, “You’re awake! Are you alright?!”
She began looking around the room and recognized it as a hospital. The confused girl questioned her brother, asking why she was there. What happened to her.
“There was some explosion at your school. The side entrance was destroyed, don’t you remember?” Keno asked.
Kira thought back to the last thing she could remember. Being in the stairway when Liz appeared. And she remembered being with someone.
“K- Korith!” she cried, “What happened to him? Where is he?!”
“Well... you see...” Keno sighed, slowly opening the curtain dividing the room.
Kira’s eyes widened, “Korith!!!”
In a bed matching hers was Korith, asleep. His left arm was in a cast and he had bandages around his stomach. Kira’s wounds were nothing compared to what she saw. She only had a few cuts and bruises.
Kira stared in shock until her brother said, “The doctors say he’ll be fine, Kira. He’s just asleep. But they want you two to spend the night here,” he looked at his watch and signed, “and they’re probably going to kick me out any minute now...”
Kira looked away from her friend, holding back tears and said goodbye to her brother as a nurse came in to take him away.
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“Ki...ra...” Korith barely moaned.
“Korith! You’re awake!” Kira cried, “Are you okay?!”
“Kira..?” he muttered, slowly turning to her, “What... Eh?! Kira! Do you remember what happened?! Anything at all?!”
Kira explained to Korith what her brother had said. She told him about the ‘explosion,’ and that the only thing she could remember before it was being with Liz under the school stairway.
“Oh, is that...all?” Korith asked, “Me... me too...”
His memory was fuzzy too, but he remembered the wolf. The dire beast. And he knew what he had to do to it.
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The next day, Kira was sent home to recover. She moaned to herself, thinking about how boring it was to her; being alone on a Friday. Around noon, she decided to go for a walk, to take advantage of the fact that she lived in such a beautiful forest.
Kira walked down the footpath behind her house and into the woods. Everything was green, the flowers were still in bloom, and the path seemed as if it had been cleared only for her. She arrived at a small clearing with a boulder in the center for her to sit and look at the clouds; her favorite spot. But it wasn’t too long before Kira felt as if she were being watched.
“Who... who’s there?” she asked, but received silence, “Anyone..?”
This time, she heard a slight bark, followed by growling. Kira began to question if it was a dog. Out of the bushes emerged a large gray wolf, with a scar on it’s left cheek.
“A wolf?!” she cried, as it walked closer, “S- stay back!!!”
The wolf thingyed it’s head and sniffed the air as it came even closer.
“Get away!” she cried, waving her arms in the air to scare it away.
The wolf whimpered and turned to run off. Kira stood in shock that her attempt to scare the beast worked. She looked around to be sure there weren’t any others before running back to her house.
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Kira spent the weekend around her house. Keno, being overly protective, never found out about the wolf incident, but still wanted her to rest and recover from her hospitalization. The whole time, she felt fine. No neck pains or anything. However, on Monday before going to the bus, Kira noticed her hair was much darker than usual.
“What’s going...on?” she asked herself, looking in the mirror, “Ugh, I’m gonna be late!”
Kira quickly brushed her odd-colored hair, ran out the door, and began down the street. She seemed to run faster than usual because, for the first time, she made it to the bus stop before the bus.
Climbing up the stairs onto the bus, and feeling overly-victorious, Kira announced to her friend, “I made it on time! Yay!”
“You may have made it on time today,” TJ taunted, “but you skipped last Friday, so you still lose. Where were you? Sick?”
“I was... well, I was sent to the hospital, and then-“ Kira said, but was cut off.
“THAT WAS YOU?!?!” TJ yelled, “You’re one of the people who were caught in that accident??! We all assumed you were just sick!!!”
Kira nodded, “Yeah... it was me... The doctors said there was an explosion, but they didn’t give any detail. They kept asking Korith and me if we knew anything... I don’t even remember any of it.”
“Korith?..” TJ sighed, “You were with him before it happened, I assume? ...Sucks.”
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“So, uh. TJ,” Kira asked, trying to change the subject, “Did you dye your hair again? Wow, white tips? That’s... Original.”
“What? Ah,” he replied, pulling the tips of his bangs into sight, “Yeah! I got it done... the other day! What do you think??”
Kira shrugged. She wasn’t a big fan of his red-dyed hair to begin with, but this was just... odd. Not that she would ever tell him that.
“Looks... Original.” she said again.
Soon after, the bus pulled into the school’s bus lane. Her eyes widened as she looked at the building. The side stairway-entrance had a gaping hole where the door once was. The sidewalk and grassed area around it was torn up and blocked off with police tape. Kira was shocked that the school was opened at all with that kind of damage.
The shocked girl could only manage to utter one word, “Wow...”
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The two went to meet their friends in the same hallways as always. This simple thing made Kira feel comfortable and forgot all about both the unusual shading of her hair and the damage of the school.
“Kira!!!” Petra cheered, “You’re here!”
“Yeah, I’m fine,” Kira replied, “Hi everyone!”
Neither Korith nor Robbie replied. It was normal for Korith, but Robbie would always say something.
“They’re been acting weird lately, just ignore them, Kira,” Petra explained.
Robbie glared angrily at Petra, “Hi... Kira.”
“What’s wrong?” Kira asked.
Robbie sighed, “...Nothing.”
“Don’t be Emo, Robbie!” TJ yelled, poking him repeatedly.
Robbie finally laughed and said, “Okay, okay! Heheh. Now stop it!”
“Heh, try and stop me!” TJ taunted while he continued to poke him.
Robbie jumped up and began to chase TJ around. Petra sighed and called them immature, not that it ever affected their fun. Robbie caught TJ in a headlock, the boy squirmed, but couldn’t free himself.
“Now, beg for mercy!” Robbie laughed.
“Ngh...” TJ grunted, “Never!”
Robbie quickly loosened his grip, which sent TJ flying backwards a few feet. He let out a grunt after falling back onto his head. Sitting up, he moaned while rubbing the back of his head. Robbie looked over and his eyes widened. TJ stoop up and took a step closer, still rubbing his newly acquired bump on the head. Petra, Kira, and even Korith looked over and stared in shock. TJ just stood in confusion.
“You’re...” Petra muttered.
Slowly, TJ’s hand moved to the side of his head, but he felt something strange. He had the ears of an animal. The ears of a fox. His teeth had changed to fangs, and his fingernails to claws. He also had a long fox tail with the same orange-and-white markings as his hair. He had transformed into what looked like a Fox-Bestia.
“Kit...su...ne?” he muttered to himself, “...No!” The fox-boy turned and ran away as fast as he could.
“T-“ Kira stuttered, “TJ?!”
She began to go after him but stopped mid-step at the sound of a deep and powerful voice that echoed around her.
‘Kitsune!’ it yelled, ‘You won’t get away this time, you d**n fox!’
Suddenly, Kira began to run after the Bestia uncontrollably. She barely let out half a scream before losing all control. She could only watch as the ‘other being’ within her chased down her friend. And with use of her own body! Meanwhile, Petra, Robbie, and Korith just stared in shock at the situation.
“K... Kira?” Korith muttered to himself.
Petra just blinked and said, “Uh... Okay... Kira’s yelling at herself and TJ... I... I don’t even want to know... Too weird for me, I’m... going to class early, bye.”
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Kira burst through the back door of the school and began sniffing the air. She felt her bones begin to shift and tried to scream in pain, but her voice wouldn’t come out. She began to grown black fur and the ears of an animal. The clothes she was wearing seemed to fade away as she transformed. The voice she had heard had now obtained it’s own body. Though she could not see it, Kira somehow knew what it was. She had the body of a dire black wolf.
“Come out, Kitsune!” the wolf yelled.
“Ookami?” said a voice from behind.
The wolf and Kira turned together to face a fox as large as them. Ookami growled and charged it as the fox charged back. Kitsune reared up onto it’s hind legs and scratched the wolf’s side, but Ookami turned and bit the fox’s ear.
Every attack weakened Kira more and more, but the wolf didn’t seem to be effected. She cried out to the beasts, begging them to stop, but received no response. Her voice echoed as if she was in another world, but she saw everything through the wolf’s eyes, felt his pain, and moved as he did.
“Enough! It’s time to end this!” Kitsune snarled.
Kitsune began to glow with an aura of flames that ignited around him. Grinning, he summoned a rain of fire down onto the wolf. Ookami and Kira cried out in pain as one. The beast began to shrink and transform into a human; Kira. She used all of her remaining strength to look up at the fox as it walked closer, and then passed out. Kitsune snarled and held his claw to her neck.
‘Kitsune, stop!!!’ TJ cried, being heard only in the fox’s mind, ‘Please!’
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Kira awoke in a world of gray. A world of nothingness.
“Where... am I?” she muttered, stepping forward, “Aah!” she cried as she fell to her knees, “Blood?!
Kira looked at her hands, they were covered with blood. She had wounds all over her body. Suddenly, a loud howl echoed around her. Kira turned to and saw it. The golden eyes- the black fur- the white fangs- facing her.
“What the hell?!” she screamed, trying to crawl away.
‘Stay where you are, mortal,’ the wolf ordered.
Kira turned in shock and yelled, “You can talk?!”
‘What did you expect me to do, bark?’ he replied, ‘I am Ookami; the god of nature,’ he bowed as best he could, ‘You have been chosen as my partner in the coming war.’
“War?!” Kira yelled, “What war?!”
Ookami whimpered, ‘Could you stop yelling? You’re hurting my ears...’
“Oh... sorry,” she softly muttered.
‘The war,’ Ookami continued, ‘of the five gods. We must slay the Cat, Hawk, Bear... and Fox.’
Ookami walked closer to the girl and held his giant paw to her back. Kira began to glow as her pain disappeared.
‘Does that help, Kid?’ the wolf smiled.
“Thank you,” she replied, amazed.
Kira stood up and placed her hand on the beast’s snout to pet him, then quickly pulled it back when she noticed him staring at her. She apologized with both fear and embarrassment.
‘It’s alright,’ Ookami said calmly, ‘You don’t need to be afraid of me. I won’t harm you. I do, however, need your help to fight this battle.’
“Yeah... Why is there a war?” Kira asked, petting him again, “And who are those other animals?”
‘The war has been going on for thousands of years. We need to find the true winner, the one who gets to serve the princess for Tatsu. For some reason, we never find out who wins, so Tatsu has us try again every five hundred years. I told the other gods that clearly I was the winner, but they’re too stupid to listen,’ he paused for a moment, then looked back to Kira, ‘We need to defeat the other gods, they’re evil. I already found Kitsune, the fox, but he got away from me.’
“The...fox..?” Kira muttered, eyes widened.
‘Yes, will you help me?’ Ookami asked again.
“The fox... Kitsune... T- TJ!” she gasped, “I remember now! You tried to kill him! You tried to kill TJ!!!”
She quickly jumped away from Ookami and raised her fists as if she was going to fight him. The wolf just laughed, even through her orders for him to stop.
‘Kid,’ Ookami chuckled, ‘is this “TJ” a friend of yours or something?’
“Yes! He’s one of my best friends!” she cried, “I won’t let you hurt him!”
‘Is he really your friend, Kid? He attacked you first. I only fought back to protect you!” Ookami growled.
“D- Did he really?” Kira muttered in shock, lowering her fists, “I... I remember chasing him... and a fox attacking me, but... it’s all fuzzy.”
‘That’s because I was in control of your body at the time, you’ll get used to that. But listen, Kid, I need you to help me. I can’t do this by myself,’ Ookami sighed, ‘Please Kid, help me out here.’
“If... TJ is really that way... If he really tried to... to kill me then... I’ll help you, Ookami...” she whimpered, thinking about her friend attacking her, “I’ll... try.”
‘What’s your name, Kid?’ Ookami asked at last.
“Kira,” she muttered.
‘Thank you, Kira,’ the wolf smiled, ‘I can feel it, Kid! Together, you and I will end this war! We will have a winner at last, and it will be us!’


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Chapter: 2
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Great update. I could not find any mistakess.

Poor TJ and Kira. I am also surprised that school remained open after the explosion. It will definately have to close after Kira/Ookami and TJ/Kitsune fought one antoher. Unless, they follow the saying "three is a charm".

Uh huh.

You need to work on your dialog skills. Stop trying to play the story out like a typical anime/webcomic, give your characters varied names so they become more distinct and try to reveal more of the characters' thoughts or feelings, instead of just expressions and description. Oh, and your cast look unusually similar to each other.