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demon offspring of Slipknot, now two people have gone with the tolkien one. I just put that up as a joke, now I don't know if I should feel complimented or lied to....

I voted sorta but i never read it i may have meant to vote yes

:evil: a pre-emptive voter, how dare you!! Nah, I'm just kidding, I vote for stuff before I even realize what I'm voting for sometimes too.

very detailed

One of the things that bugged me reading this is the lack of paragraph designation, for lack of a better term. All of the lines start at the same spot so it looks like a large blur. You can see where the paragraphs end, and hence the beginning.

I did like the detail you put into this. However, Arachnion has a point, it is possible to over detail a scene. Overall though I'd say it was pretty good.

Yeah... the paragraph thing is because I copied and pasted this from word, and for some reason you can't use the tab spaces on forums, so it's hard to tell when a new paragraph starts.

its not bad, but put some indents and more spacing in there
itshardtoreadareallybigwalloflotsandlotsoftextsortoflikethisbutthisisanexaggerationasyounodoubtcantell
see what i mean?^

It looked better as a word document. :cry:

Edit: wow, someone chose the "I now hate you for posting this" option. This makes.... four people on the internet who hate me.

perhaphs you could psot that as an attatchment or link to it on a host somewear?
or im sure you can find a .doc to .html converter, in which case have it hosted up somewear and link to that, then we jsut click the link and see it as a webpage
at anyrate, its interesting enough i want to read more XD

EDIT: it wasnt me as i dont hate without reason, and better to be hated by random people than people you know right?
xP

GIRR STUPID FLOOD TIMER!!!

Well, if Chapter one turns out good I'll post it, but probably nothing after that. I do still hold out the hope of getting this thing published.... after a long, long time.

Edit: Yeah... it probably is better for internet people to hate me then for people in real life. And internet people have such creative threats, like a few months ago when someone reportedly "wanted to blow off my head with a tnt-modified BB gun".

XD
"dream big and reach for the black holes"
or something to that idea^

That sounds about right.